Naomi wanted to be sick, and puking directly onto the shriveled corpse hanging off her arm might actually improve its looks. She didn’t know if this body were once Errilol’s, suggesting he was once mortal or if the corpse were of a favored follower, and at the moment, she didn’t much care. She wanted to be free of the abomination and to kill the entity that animated it. She continued to pull away from the corpse, but Errilol came with her. He was not exerting any effort to keep her still, but passively holding on like a rag doll with a claw like grasp on her arm. She whacked the dead arm with the shield, but at the odd angle, she couldn’t get any strength behind the blow.
“Let go!” she shouted, not really expecting him to do it, but she really, really, REALLY wanted him to let go of her arm. She was going to catch something from him, she knew it. Rotted corpses were not hygienic.
“But I could do so much for you. Just let me in.”
The way he said it made it sound dirty and coming from the mouth of a corpse made it just all sorts of wrong. She dropped the shield to pry at his fingers. He laughed at her futile efforts. It was infuriating. If she could just get him off of her, she’d be able to do what she came to do.
In a flash of clarity, she realized how stupid she was being. Her mission was not to get away from Errilol but to destroy him. She had a free arm. She should use it. She switched the horn to her free hand and stabbed the corpse in the chest. Bones cracked under the force of the blow, and the horn wedged into the chest cavity. Nothing happened.
Errilol chuckled. The horn bobbed as his chest shook. “This is why women are not warriors,” he said. Naomi, suddenly, found herself airborne as the god tossed her aside. He was no longer a rag doll. He stood on his own. She skidded to the ground in shock. The horn had not worked. The unicorns had assured her it would. What had she done wrong?
She shakily picked herself up as she kept a wary eye on the god. She was now defenseless. The horn was still stuck in his chest, and the shield rested somewhere on the ground. She realized with unhappy irony that by making her weapons invisible she couldn’t find them. Errilol grasped the horn to pull it from his chest, but searing light erupted from the object, and the god howled in pain.
She crept around the god as she tried to pinpoint where she had dropped the shield. It had to still be close to where Errilol stood. He tried to remove the horn again. The light that erupted again. The god let out another enraged howl. She scurried up to him and felt around for the shield. Her hand grazed it. As she picked it up, Errilol’s hand shot down and grabbed her by the back of her neck. He jerked her up to his face. She brought the shield up between them. “Remove the horn, girl.” This close to the god, she noticed fine cracks had formed in the bones. The horn was harming him.
“Having a little trouble?” The god shook her by the scruff of her neck. She felt like the rag doll now, but even so, she saw more small cracks form in his bones, spider webbing out. The horn was working, but maybe she could speed up the process.
“My priests are on their way. They have killed your friends. Tavik is dead too. He was no longer any use to me. Give up.”
She didn’t believe him, but all he said could be true. She shook as she answered, “No.”
“Why would I lie? They’re dead. How could you think you could destroy me? I am a god. You’re only a puny woman, not even a virgin.”
She knew he was doing something to her. He was in her head, making her feel his words, influencing her. She had to fight him. She reached out, and her finger tips grazed the horn. “Pull it out, Naomi. It’s the only thing you can do. Your death will be quick,” he urged. He brought her closer.
“Go to hell,” she said and struck the horn with the heel of her hand. The horn shot through the rest of his body till the point broke through to the other side.
Errilol screamed and threw her away again as the bright light erupted and sustained. She hit the wall and slid down it. She woozily held the shield in front of her to block out the light. Errilol continued to scream. She thought the sound would make her ears bleed. The light was blinding her. She could not see Errilol or the room at all. She huddled behind the shield. She squeezed her eyes shut and threw her free arm across her face to block out as much of the light as possible, but searing whiteness still stabbed into her brain.
Finally, there was an explosion, and debris pinged off the shield. The light vanished. She peeked over the shield and saw a small blast crater had formed in the center of the room. There was no sign of Errilol or green fire.
She crept toward the crater and looked into it. In the center, a broken unicorn horn rested. “Well, great. What the hell am I supposed to do now?” she asked looking down at the broken horn. She’d used it to transport everyone there. Yula, Agatha, Mr. Squibbles and she were now stranded. That was if the others were alive. What if Errlilol hadn’t been lying? The dim room began to fill with a golden glow. She turned around and found herself once again surrounded by unicorns.
“I thought you weren’t allowed in the homes of gods.”
We aren’t, but this is no longer a home of a god. You have succeeded. Errilol is slain.
“Naomi!” She turned to the doorway and with relief at the sound of Agatha’s voice. She couldn’t help giggling at how the two women bounced as they ran into the room. They didn’t look hurt in any way. Yula and Agatha skidded to a stop at the sight of all the unicorns.
“Who wants to go home?” she asked.
Naomi knew no fear as she stood outside the main gate to Tavik’s castle because this time she had her own guard to protect her, for who would be foolish enough to attack a herd of unicorns? The guards were slack jawed as she waltzed past them.
Mrs. Boon met her at the foot of the stairs leading to the private chambers. She did not scrape her knee to Naomi, nor did she look at all pleased to see her. Naomi gave the housekeeper a cool stare. “I would get my things in order if I were you.”
“I am to be let go?”
“What do you think? You held me prisoner. If you don’t leave, I’ll do the same to you.”
Mrs. Boon’s back stiffened, but she nodded. Naomi continued on her way and didn’t pause again until she was outside Tavik’s door. She stared at the wood beams. He was on the other side. She put her hands flat against the door and leaned her forehead onto it. It was almost over. Everything was almost over.
“Could you let me be alone with him first?” she asked her two friends who had followed her up.
“Of course, dear,” Yula said.
Agatha laid her hand on the center of Naomi’s back to give it a gentle rub. “Go to him, Naomi. He’s waiting.”
Naomi lifted her head and nodded. She opened the door and slipped inside. It was almost over. Errilol was dead. The unicorns were safe. All that needed to be done now was awaken Tavik. She felt a gut clenching fear at the task. It had been several months since he’d seen her. The time when he was delusional didn’t count. What would he think when he saw her? Would he be happy or would he turn away? Naomi took a deep breath to steady her nerves. His reaction didn’t matter she told herself. All she truly wanted was to restore him back to his health. If he turned away from her, she would go. She’d find something else to do, see if Agatha needed an apprentice maybe. Him well was all that mattered. She wished she really were that self-sacrificing, but she knew the truth. If Tavik turned away from her, somebody was getting hurt in the physical sense. She’d lay odds on Tavik. She’d just killed a god for him NAKED, what more could a guy ask for?
She marched over to the side of the bed. He had not been disturbed from when she’d left him. He was still unmasked. She wondered what the priests and servants had made of his state. She laid her palm across his forehead. He was like a block of ice.
She leaned in and laid her lips across his, which were cold and lifeless. She squeezed her eyes shut to block out thoughts of funerals and final farewell kisses. Tavik would come back. He would be okay. His lips remained lifeless under hers. Why wasn’t he waking up? Tears began to leak out. She raised her head to wipe her tears off of him.
“Come on, Tavik. Wake up,” she begged. She lowered her head again to kiss him. The unicorns had assured her that this would work. She began to despair at the lack of response. If he didn’t wake up, it would be her fault. She’d been the one to put him in this cold state. She’d done it to protect him from Errilol while she confronted the god, but it wouldn’t matter if he didn’t recover. He still did not stir. She rose and stumbled back. She’d call Agatha. The witch would know what to do. She turned toward the door to call the women in.
“No, Naomi come back. Don’t leave me.”
She whirled back to face Tavik. His eyes were still closed, but he had spoken. She rushed back to the bed. “I’m here, Tavik. I won’t leave you. I’m here to stay,” she babbled. “Tavik, open your eyes. Look at me.”
He didn’t open his eyes, and the blue pallor had not lessened. She had the mad fear that he had not spoken, that she’d imagined it. “Missed you,” he breathed. She gasped with relief. She grabbed his shoulders and shook him.
“Wake up. I need to know you’re going to be all right.” It made her sick the way his head lolled on his neck as she shook him. She jumped on the bed and straddled his torso. She held his head between her hands. She would bring him back, but the only way she knew how was the way she’d been told. Kiss him, the unicorns had told her. She began to rain kisses down on him. She kissed his eyes, cheeks, forehead, mouth, ears, chin, jaw, eyebrows, and nose. She covered his face with kisses. Her lips swiftly grew numb on his cold skin. She was kissing his mouth once again when it responded and opened to her. Her cry of joy was muffled. She kissed him a few seconds longer before raising her head.
His eyes were open now. He looked up at her with wonder. “You’re back,” he murmured.
She dumbly nodded her head as she wiped her tears of relief away. Tavik’s brow furrowed. “I can’t move my body.”
Naomi had an inkling why. She picked up his hand and brought it to her lips. She gently kissed it all over. Tavik’s hand then flexed and cupped her cheek. She laughed. Tavik looked bemused. She had just begun to kiss down his arm when the bedroom door swung open, and Yula and Agatha tumbled in. They picked themselves up and blinked at the picture of Naomi straddling Tavik on his bed.
“I don’t think they’ve finished their hellos,” Yula said grabbing Agatha to drag her back out of the room.
Agatha brushed her off. “I think the sun will rise before they’re done.” Naomi blushed and crawled off Tavik. Agatha came up to the side of the bed and looked him over. “Well, how do you feel?”
He chuckled. “I’ll tell you when Naomi’s done with me.” Agatha raised an eyebrow and looked at her. Naomi could feel her cheeks burning brighter.
“He’ll be all right,” she muttered. Tavik chuckled some more. She sent him a warning look.
“But you kissed him obviously so he’s fine,” Mr. Squibbles said sticking his head out of Agatha’s pocket.
Naomi stared at her shoes.
Yula grew concerned. She came up to the bed and laid her hand on his brow. “But you must be all right. Naomi went through such peril to help you. She killed Errilol and saved the unicorns. The unicorns told her a kiss would save you.”
Naomi had been holding onto Tavik’s reawakened hand. It spasmed and squeezed hers as he slanted his eyes to her. “Errilol’s dead?”
“Can’t you tell, Tavik?” Agatha said. He closed his eyes and took a deep breath. They watched him tensely. She’d been sure Errilol was no more, but if Tavik could still sense him…
His eyes opened. “He’s gone. I don’t feel him at all,” he said in wonder.
Agatha smiled and looked over at her. “Naomi did that. She saved you.”
“Yes, she did.” His eyes slanted to her. She stared back. Agatha slipped her arm around Yula’s shoulders and began to lead her out.
“Let’s let these two get back to their kissing,” Agatha said with a twinkle in her eye.
Once they were gone, Naomi groaned and flopped down beside Tavik. “What’s wrong?” he asked.
“Your mother knows.”
“Mothers know everything.”
Naomi propped her head up and looked down at him. She pulled the sheet away. “So what would you like to get the feeling back in first?” she asked.
“You choose.”
She ginned wickedly. “You’re going to regret that.”
“I highly doubt it,” he replied.
Chapter 55
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52 comments:
Wait...The End...as in the END!!!!
OMG I'm torn between screaming NOOOO because I love the characters so much....AND screaming THIS WAS THE PERFECT END, and I couldn't have it any other way!
Oh yay, I'm so glad I decided to check on Wednesday night instead of waiting until Thursday. Good good story, but I'm sad it's over :-)
Wow, perfect ending, great writing. Sad its over but great story all the same. keep writing.
The end? Surely not! I've been following this story since early in the year and now it's over...
Just wanted to say I thoroughly enjoyed this story, and hope it's not the end for Agatha and Mr Squibbles et al (Not to mention the killer Kangeroos and flying cottages etc)
Congratulations. A wonderful story well told and one that I hope people will come back to again and again.
Rob
YAY!
I was wondering if she ever saw her family and world again.
Maybe there is an epilogue? Oh, well, this was great. ^_^
nooooooooooooooooooooo it's over, i can't believe that. I loved this story sooooooooo much, well lovely ending. Wonderful, windvein :) waiting for the new story now :)
Really good ending! I was sad to see the end but you did an excellent job. I hope too that this isn't the last of these characters, I have really grown to love them.
Well that's one way to get feeling back. I am sure it would be lots of fun for both of them.
I am glad to see it has worked out for them, but sad that we might not see them again.
First, it's me Windvein. I changed my profile name to S.A. Hunter for lots of little reasons I won't bore you with.
Thank you, everyone for reading and giving me encouragement and help. This is sadly the end. I have absolutely nothing written or planned for a sequel. Doesn't mean it will never happen, but not this year, or probably decade (what's left of it).
I don't know when I'll start posting a new story. I'm thinking it will be at least three months, and it will most likely be a sequel to Scary Mary.
Check my site every once and a while for news of upcoming stories.
Thanks again!
Great ending windvein. am going to miss these people they are like a new family now lol. hope to see more from you.
Thank you for sharing your story, and for letting us into a bit of this world! It was a beautiful tale!
The end seemed slightly rushed to me, but it might just be because I didn't want it to end :)
Thank you again!
Wowho!, good story, cute ending.
sigh now I have to ponder what kind of boring life they will have together. HA!
This is a wonderful story! You have done an awesome job with it and I am looking forward to reading more of your work.
I was referred to your story by Jenifer Armstrong's website Free online novels. I am very glad that I have followed her suggestion and read your story. This ius absolutely awesome! I will be letting my friends now about this one too!
Good luck and keep on writeing! Looking forward to more with these charcters and this world!
i really do hope you write a sequel! wow. speechless. brilliantly written and conceptualized.
are you planning on publishing hardcopy, because i would definitely buy this one for the bookshelf... and the sequel :P
Ack! You said the S word! No, no sequel for UB planned. But it could happen, but not anytime soon. Writing the sequel to Scary Mary presently. Thanks for all your comments. They're great and helpful.
I'm working on the hard copy edition of SM. I hope to have it out soonish.
I came across this story just a few days ago and I was instantly hooked. I just finished it and I truly enjoyed it. I just wanted to say Thanks for being the source of my entertainment for the past few days. Sad that it ended but I'm looking forward to reading more of your work.
beautiful.....luv the ending....
gr8 book
WOW!!!I was going to leave a comment on quiet a few other pages, but i didn't want to stop reading long enough to do so! Beside a few mistakes that stood out at me, I was enthralled! I love the characters and the plot, all of the twists keep this a page turner for me. Thanks for the wonderful read!
I LOVED this story!!!!!
Thank you everyone for your kind words. I'm so happy you've enjoyed UB.
I LOVED this story... it was very original theme from my reading experience with just the right amount of romance. Your characters were perfect, and somehow you happened to create the perfect man with Tavik!
Your sense of humor is also great... Mr. Squibbles was on the verge of ridiculous, but somehow the story wouldn't have been the same without him.
Great job overall! I can't wait to see what else you will thrill us with next.
~Piosenna
Thank you, Piosenna. I really appreciate your comments. Mr. Squibbles is a very different sort of mouse.
OMG!!!!!!!!! I love this story.
I absolutely fell in love with Naomi. There should be an epilogue! VERY VERY GOOD STORY....
I read it at work loved it! =)
Glad you liked it! You just want to see them finish their 'hellos' as Yula put it, don't you? ;-)
Please, please, please, please make a sequal to Unicorn Bait. I love all of your books; and I want to see more of Stalking Shadows and a begining sequal to Unicorn Bait.
It keeps me alive at work; now I've read everything and... there's still 2 hours left in the day; the rest of the week; and then weeks to come.. Only getting to read Stalking Shadows every Monday.
I relize writers are very busy, but as you can see numerous amounts of fans want a sequal and possibly a sequence to Unicorn Bait.. And hopefully a sequence to Scary Mary/Stalking Shadows.
Please do as your fans wish, when you get the chance write a sequal to Unicorn Bait.
It would be much appreciated. :( I'll cry without it.
I have to say that all these requests for a sequel does get my brain percolating, but there is no way I could start it anytime soon. I'm neck deep in Stalking Shadows and won't be finished with that for several months. I'm also sort of hoping to write a superhero story after SS called Magnificus, a quirky chick lit sort of superhero story, but ideas for a sequel to UB will keep brewing in the back of my brain.
Oh please do. Believe me as a very interested reader into your writings. I want to buy all the books that come out on paper. I've never been so interested in reading until the Twilight Series. Once I found this website... It kept me coming back, wanting more. Your writing is so much like S. Meyer's writing. Keeping everyone on edge; until another chapter/book comes out.
I have a feeling Scary Mary will be some sort of Series like Twilight... Or well I hope.
It disapoints me that Unicorn Bait was over.
To tell the truth, I didn't even start reading UB until I had nothing to do until Chapt 5 pt 1 Shadowman came out, so I started reading. After the first HALF chapter; I couldn't stop. I even printed out what chapter I didn't finsih at work so I wouldn't be completly left on hook.
Alas, now all of my reading is done until Chapter 6 (---) of Stalking Shadows comes out.
Very superb writing, hope theres a sequal to UB.
Can't wait to read your Superhero book.
Jessica,
It really helps to know that people are enjoying my stuff. Thank you for all the encouragement.
I'm working on chapter 6 of SS today. Hope I can get a good bit done.
So it's the end.:'D sad but it has a nice ending.i'm kind of hoping for an epilogue, if the sequel will be not be written in a matter of time.But, it's worth waiting.
You're a really wonderful writer, windvein/s.a. hunter.ü
surely you're one of a kind.
keep writing,stay inspired.
i'll be waiting for your other works.ü
Godbless!
-best regards from the philippines,
Rae.♥
Rae, thank you so much. We'll have to wait and see if Tavik and Naomi have any more adventures.
S.A Hunter! I love this story much better then the other two I've read. Please PLEASE PLEASE either write the sequel or let me play around with it. Once again! Quick reader. Read it in 3 1/2 hours!
The alaskan chick.
Denise,
I like hearing how people may have liked one story better than another. It's interesting to find out what appeals to people. I am thinking about a sequel, but haven't committed anything to paper yet. I'll get to it eventually. You certainly are a fast reader. Wish I read that fast or better yet wrote that fast. Thanks.
danx 4 writin such a damn gud buk
danx danx danx danx danx
i loved d buk its damn cool
pooja,
Glad you enjoyed it! Thank you for all the comments. :-)
LOVELY! hate to be a pooper but: 'The light that erupted again.' um, it's a phrase. :)
i half-expected to hear errilol scream. hmm. that would've been so neat. the cliche of all cliche, but the villain scream is missing! hahaha. i so want it, i can't get over.
aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhh!!! it's over. :(
can you hear the people chanting?....
*sequel!* *sequel!* *sequel!*
lmao. really,really,really,great job. XD
*clicks link to stalking shadows* XD
Nice!
Great Story.
Next book about this, is making Tavik visit his mother-in-law ...
(for serving the unicorns, she should be granted to be a follower of them; and perform healing touches and transport at will; and be able to speak to them; but she can't visit any other gods temples.)
Thanks, ALI3N. I have played around with the idea of a what connection Naomi would have with the unicorns afterwards.
Well, I just found this story yesterday afternoon and finished the last half of last chapter today, I liked it, I liked the humor of it,( evil kangaroos, wizard of oz reference, etc.) and I had to read all the way to the end,but it didn't really make me FEEL, in the way some other stories do, it would have helped to get a little farther into the characters heads, it felt like a rough draft. See you around, Amy
Hi Amy,
Thanks for commenting. I'm glad you enjoyed it enough to finish. I'm not sure how I could get further into anyone's heads except Naomi since this is strictly her POV, but if the characters didn't feel real enough to you then that is something I should think on and try to correct.
Really enjoyed the story, your writing, and the characters. Evil kangaroos,orange yetis and double moons were certainly interesting touches and allowed the strangeness of it all to have a weird feeling of familiarity. Mr. Squibbles had the best insults I've seen in a long time! Yes, there were some awkward transitions here and there, and some grammatical errors, but overall a terrific story. Fixes will be easy if you ever decide to publish on paper. Keep writing, keep writing, keep writing!!! You got talent as well as a storytellers mind! Christy
Thank you, Christy. I do need to give UB another good going over, but I'm glad you were able to find enjoyment in it despite its flaws.
I have really enjoyed reading this story. I was totally brought into the story and related all the characters to my friends and family. I was drown in immediately which is what I liked. You have done and excellent job. The sexual tension was well written. Thank you for a good read.
Thank you, Anon. Do you mean you pictured your friends and family as the characters? I've never been able to do this.
Fudge!! I wanted it to continue going on :( I even got in trouble reading this story during work, and it had to stop at chapter 55?!
Lol, I do hope you make more though. I have never EVER been soo interested in a book before like this. If this is ever out in stores, I'm buying as many as I can to give to my buds, and if they won't accept it ... well they will, trust me ;)
PLEASE make a sequel! >.< I've gotta read more of this, or at least make another type of story dating back in a medival-type setting. You're officially my favourite author. Too bad you've only made Scary Mary/sequel and just Unicorn Bait. I'd love to read more of your books, even if it means getting into more trouble during work, lol.
~Sarah
I read the story till 3 a.m. It is a wonderful mixture of what people like in fantasy, love stories and fairy tales. Though half of that stuff has been already used by other authors (unicorns, masked warriors who are extremely good at kisses, secret tunnels, witches, etc.), another half, including two moons, is real success. One should have a gift to fascinate people with well-trodden plots and characters put together in a really gripping story. P.S. Beg your pardon for my wording - I'm not a native speaker.
Haha i started reading this story this morning and havent taken my eyes from the screen since! Your amazing. Seriously.
Beth
I started reading this story last night, went to work with it on my mind and rushed home to finish it. You must do a sequel. I LOVED IT!!!
I've also read Scary Mary and up to Ch 10 Pt 1 of Stalking Shadows. When is the rest of it coming out? January 2010 is almost over. Please come out of your hiatus!!!
Man i'm not kidding i'm sooo close to crying! I loved it TOO much!!!! It CAN'T end, it just can't! But that was perfect! I hope you've either already gotten it published or you'r going to. God you'd get alota money i would buy one instantly!!! I loved it!!! Why'd you have to stop there?! Congrats though brilliant story. I'm trying to write a story too hopfully it's at least half as good as your's!
Aimee xx
Oh yeah Aimee again just wanted to say that I read this whole story non-stop, couldn't leave the computer! I had to have my dinner brought into me lol. Thanks for a good no perfect story to read. Thanks, you rock!
Aimee xx
Read scary mary and stalking shadows plus unicorn bait in one day.. must.. have.. more.. O___O
~alex
Thank you everyone for your kind comments. I'm glad you enjoyed Unicorn Bait. If interested, the conclusion of Stalking Shadows is being posted over the next couple of days. Chapter 12 is now up of SS.
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