Comments on Unicorn Bait: Chapter 1

I love his book! <3 I love it so much that i re...

2011-03-07T17:36:04.291-05:00

I love his book! <3 I love it so much that i read 32 chs. in 2 hrs. I hope you write more books soon.

I like your style. The opening was punchy but too...

2010-04-28T20:42:26.593-04:00

I like your style. The opening was punchy but too confusing. How about starting with her in the hut? That way you can have her thrust into the action and explain stuff later... as you'll have to if I'm going to stay interested...

Can you meet me Upstairs where we'll set off a...

2010-01-04T19:08:53.683-05:00

Can you meet me Upstairs where we'll set off aboard friendly dragons and kick ass? Then, celebrate at the local tarvern our resurrection? Truly, I sayeth unto thee, worthy liege, I'd greatly enjoy that. God bless.

Hmm, others have said they find the beginning a li...

2009-06-09T17:08:13.725-04:00

Hmm, others have said they find the beginning a little jarring and confusing too. When I first wrote it, I felt strongly about starting off with a bang, but maybe I do need to pad the opening a little and ease a little more gently into the teleportation.

to tell you the truth, i was lost. lol. with the w...

2009-06-01T10:50:59.158-04:00

to tell you the truth, i was lost. lol. with the whole transport thingy. but the frying pan was great. literally lol'd at that part. :D

i read scary mary a week ago, and i gotta say, this is a lot longer compared to that one.

Thanks, Anon!

2009-03-28T02:21:00.000-04:00

Thanks, Anon!

LOLing.:))

2009-03-20T02:28:00.000-04:00

LOLing.:))

Thanks, Miladysa. I'm really happy with it. The ol...

2009-02-07T18:16:00.002-05:00

Thanks, Miladysa. I'm really happy with it. The old design never sat well with me. Glad you liked the first chapter too. :)

Great new site design and interesting first chapte...

2009-02-07T17:06:00.000-05:00

Great new site design and interesting first chapter too! :D

Stormy, thank you for stopping by. I've been kind ...

2008-03-27T05:45:00.000-04:00

Stormy, thank you for stopping by. I've been kind of scattered. I thought it would be best to start with bam. The lead-up to the transport isn't the interesting part. Everyone wants to get to the arrival, at least that's how I am.

Ok, first, sorry for taking so long to get to this...

2008-03-18T18:14:00.000-04:00

Ok, first, sorry for taking so long to get to this. Didn't mean to.

Second, the first time I read this, I kind of was up to chapter nine before I'd taken my eyes off the screen. ^_^

Ok, now onto the actual review...

You don't pull any punches do you? BAM! She's there. No lead-in, no backstory, nothing, just right into the action.

I wonder - was it deliberate,

I'm glad you found it funny. Hope you like this, P...

2007-12-24T00:25:00.000-05:00

I'm glad you found it funny. Hope you like this, PQ. You're so kind to read and respond.

Sorry it took me so long to read and review^_^ Fir...

2007-12-23T20:33:00.000-05:00

Sorry it took me so long to read and review^_^ First chapter packed full of humour:D